Monday, 8 March 2010

Mistaken Identity

She was running through the dark streets of a ghost town. She could hear the snap of a wolf’s jaw near her ankles. All around her were lonely streets. The houses had an abandoned look. She started knocking on doors to escape the pack of wolves. She twisted the knob of one door and suddenly she heard a loud ringing.

Raksha woke up with a start to hear her mobile phone ringing. She grabbed the phone and wondered who was calling her at this hour. It was her boss at the law firm. He had called to inform her that the police had apprehended the serial rapist who was suspected of raping at least forty women.

She checked her bedside clock and saw that it was already 5.30 am. She threw her covers aside and went to the bathroom. She might as well start the day early. There was a lot of work to be done.

Her firm was representing two of the victims and they needed justice. Raksha was a criminal attorney and had a fantastic track record of putting criminals behind bars. She was going to be the lead counsel in this case.

Raksha got dressed, gathered up the files in a briefcase and hopped in her car to go to work. Her mind kept going back to the terrified faces of her clients. She was haunted by their stories. The life of the victims was in tatters after the incident. Even though they tried putting up a brave face, both of them were facing a uphill task of getting their life back.

Raksha reached her office. She started working and time flew by. The photos of the man they had apprehended and also documents relating to his arrest were strewn over her desk when she heard a knock on the door. She looked up to see that it was her mother who had come to take her for lunch. Her mother gave her a smile and came inside the office.

And suddenly she saw her mother falling down. Raksha rushed to her mother’s side and sprinkled water on her face to revive her. Her mother opened her eyes and looked up at her with pleading eyes and said ‘I am sorry’.

Raksha’s head was reeling after the conversation with her mother. She felt as if she was back in her dream. She did not know who she was anymore. Her identity had been wiped clean in a matter of two hours. She felt someone had punched her in the stomach.

Her mother had been a single parent and had raised Raksha alone. She had been a father and mother to her. Though Raksha missed a father figure in her life she was happy to be the daughter of such a strong woman. But today’s revelation had shaken Raksha to the core. She walked in daze towards the courtroom.

She saw a lot of commotion at the door with photographers and press snapping pictures. She walked towards the door and saw through the crowd. Her eyes met the cold piercing eyes of the rapist. She was looking into the eyes of her father, her biological father.

32 comments:

Anjali said...

Whoa!! Pretty intense. Nice kahani meh twist. Like it :)

Nalini Hebbar said...

OMG!...what a finish! WOW

Parth J Dave said...

The start strongly gripped me... I just couldn't find anything great in the middle parts, but the end blew it all! It was the best... It helped me to make sense of the entire thing.. Superb! By the way, such kind of stories are woven by bestselling authors.. This was just a short-story but it was intense, powerful and made an impact!

Awesome read, Lazy Pineapple!

Phoenixritu said...

Loved the crisp narration and the "kahani mein twist"

magiceye said...

brilliant! fast paced, no let up, gripping. very fluid too!

Kcalpesh said...

Very engaging and nicely narrated!

sushmita said...

really good one

Pallavi said...

Liked the twist. Nice narration.

MiSh said...

ur stories r just getting better. i really admire ur style of writing - emotions, action, drama, characterization, scene depiction, content - ur stories r really short but they have all of these aspects. nice crisp stories. keep it up.

Quirkyloon said...

Wow. That was really good.

Nicely done!

Rajlakshmi said...

thats a well narrated story ...loved the storyline...

Dagny Taggart said...

Fantastic!!!

I was a little lost in the middle...but the end was....Wohhhh!!!

Super Narrative :)

megzone said...

OMG... Kahani mein twist..
your write ups especially this one reminds me sooo much of Jeffry Archer's "Twist In the Tale", a collection of short stories where the end adds a complete new aspect to the story and thats where the plot is revealed..
You completely rocked this one.. built up the suspense and the end was damn awesome...

Lazy Pineapple said...

Anju : Thanks sis :)

Nalini: Thanks :)

Parth : Oh I am overwhelmed by your comment :) Yes I have just started experimenting with fiction so still finding my way around story tellling.

Phoenixritu: Thanks :)

Magiceye: Thanks :)

Sush : Thanks for reading :)

Kcalpesh: welcome to my blog and thank you for your comment :)

Pallavi : Thank you, I am glad you liked it :)

Lazy Pineapple said...

Mihir: Wow, what a comment...really made my day :)
I am planning on writing longer stories.

Quirky: Thanks a ton dear :)

Rajlakshmi: Thanks you for your comment :)

Dagny: Welcome to my blog and thanks for your comment. I am glad you like my post :)

Megzone: Wow....you blew my mind away. Jefferey Archer.....? I am glad you loved my post.

Me-Me King said...

Wow, this story held my attention from the very beginning. Nicely done....*shivers*.

Anirban said...

This one was kind of creepy as you intended it to be. Nicely done!

NIsh said...

Beautifuly woven together..The start as well as end were the highlight exactly as it should be :)

Lazy Pineapple said...

Anirban : Yeah, wanted it to be creepy...thanks :)

Nish: Thank you Nish...I am glad you liked it :)

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Mr. Stupid said...

Wow. Superb story. I expected the whole thing to be a part of her nightmare. Great ending!

Navin said...

I love twists!!! Nice gripping tale

Lazy Pineapple said...

Mr. Stupid: Thank you :) heheh I thought most will think so...

Navin : Thanks :) I am glad u liked it.

Smita said...

Ma'am have you ever thought of writing a thriller? I mean Novel!!! You have it in you to come up with it!!! Why don't u make a collection of short storied and send the manuscript to a publisher?? I mean it~~

Sonia Sunny Thomas said...

Short and crisp and yet thrilling to the core.. i loved it..

Lazy Pineapple said...

Smita : wow...I am blown away by your comment. Thank you for your support and putting that idea in my head. Would surely think about that idea...

I have no idea how to go about writing a book...bt sure need to do some research on this :)

Sonia: Welcome to my blog. I am glad you like my post :)

A said...

Just got to your blog. This one is intense. Nicely written.

A said...

Just got to your blog. This one is intense. Nicely written.

Me-Me King said...

Wow, this story held my attention from the very beginning. Nicely done....*shivers*.

Rajlakshmi said...

thats a well narrated story ...loved the storyline...

Parth J Dave said...

The start strongly gripped me... I just couldn't find anything great in the middle parts, but the end blew it all! It was the best... It helped me to make sense of the entire thing.. Superb! By the way, such kind of stories are woven by bestselling authors.. This was just a short-story but it was intense, powerful and made an impact!

Awesome read, Lazy Pineapple!

Rajendra Raikwar said...

nice one...

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